I know you find me in everything you see,
Cause you still love me, crazily as can be.
Now that I have gone, far away from you,
You have replaced me, with someone new.
In her glistening eyes I come alive to you,
Her smile keeps me, forever haunting you.
In her merry chatter you hear my voice,
Her hair colour is the exact hue as mine.
You had told me when I was with you,
You would forever, always remain true.
My face you might replace, with someone new,
My heart is what will, forever shine through.
In your glance she sees me too,
That is what makes her, angry with you.
Your restlessness is what makes her so sure,
That I am present amongst you for sure,
Though you love her truly and sincerely,
It's me; you are in love with and will always be.
For you can never, forget what I did for you,
Since when you were nobody, I supported you.
Today you have everything you ever need,
But you have lost me and that is the irony.
While you are chasing a ghost, that once was me,
Ensure you hold on to her love as tight as can be.
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Wow, Shuvashree, very powerful and telling... I like it - but then I like most everything you write. You are the true romantic writer that I enjoy reading.
Warmest regards, Viv
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yes dear u are a creation of nature u are lovely one
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Hi Leena,
Thanks so much. So glad that you liked it and could relate to it.
Shuvashree
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Sure Cheti,
Will surely do. Maybe you could buy me one after all I made you a poet didn't I ???
Shuvashree
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Hi Sophie,
Got it now.
I am through this poem just reiterating what I earlier said in another poem. The difference between loving and being in love.
Moreover the heroine here has left / died so the guy has to move on isn't it ???
Shuvashree
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A good emotional write. Keep up the good work
Leena
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lol ! sure ! and drink to it too
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My face you might replace, with someone new
....these lines are from the poetry
i just said if love is gonna alter like this its not love
love is not love that alters when alteration finds
its only about the hero and the heorine in the poetry
not anything to do with sulekha!!
hope you got me now!
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Kanjubi,
Thanks alot but I think you have somewhere missed the essence of my poem. Me the narrator of the poem is either dead or gone away and now I want my loved one to move on and find a love. I said that he is unable to forget me because of various reasons and one is that I supported him when he was nobody and had nothing. Inspite of that I want him to move on and be happy. I don't think there is any mention of my (the narrator) wanting something. I just want him to move on, find love and be happy as i've anyway gone
Shuvashree
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Hi Cheti,
Will surely try and make some changes to the lines. The problem is often the flow of thought goes when trying to edit too much so I usually just post after Im done or it loses the spontaneity but surely i'll see what best i can do with this.
What an achievement. I have turned a person disliking poetry into a poet .
I surely need a pat on my shoulder
The lines "Since when you were nobody, I supported you" seem to fit in perfectly so i'lll change it right away but the two you I feel kind of give it a rhyme.
Thanks so much.
Shuvashree
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